So I rememberd #WipItUpWednesday, even if I messed up my Master's work schedule (off work Tuesday night, not Wednesday night). I'm sharing something different; I know :D like I never ever manage different LOL. But I'm going to share my editing note as the scene set up.
Is this even close to any prayer or would this be horrifically offensive to include in the book? This paragraph is lackluster from lack of knowledge and indecision on it. --- Ziba stepped into the mosque and headed for the bathroom as she removed her head scarf. She quickly completed her ritual bathing and then moved to the prayer hall. Spotting an empty prayer carpet, she slipped her shoes off beside the wall before approaching the empty space. She knelt on the carpet and began doing whatever Muslims do when they pray. Her breathing pleasantly slowed as peace filled her. “Allah is above all people. Allah is peace. I wish to be a servant of Allah.” She continued through her prayers, focused on the connection. Powered by Linky Tools Click here to visit the other #WipItUpWednesday hoppers
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Meredith O’Reilly
2/21/2018 10:01:22 pm
Don’t worry about ever missing up WIP, Joelle. We all loose track of our schedules every once and a while. Great snippet! :-)
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Joelle Casteel
2/21/2018 10:35:51 pm
Thanks for the comment, Meredith. Looking at it taken out of the WIP like this, I'm almost thinking that this is a good use of narrative summary. Yeah, there's a lot of non-traditional stuff for a romance, but I'm not sure even if "Muslim woman praying" is quite where I want to go. I mean, more than I already have.
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Tiffany
2/22/2018 02:22:27 pm
I dont think it would be offensive. Why not have it in there? If it fits the character and the story. There are other books out there that include Christian prayers so why not.
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Joelle Casteel
3/15/2018 08:03:32 pm
You're no doubt right, Tiffany. That's the thing- some of the behavior of the "islamic world" is down right awful at times. But I'm already writing a character who breaks a lot of ideas about Muslims. Heck, I already vented about one commentor on something else from the story basing his views about Muslims on Fox News.
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